Stori

I have to agree with you. ...Does anyone else think maybe the flock's gonna go into space?

Hello Ready- I shall point out a few errors. There wasn't no snow "There was no snow" or "There wasn't any" should go here. asking her what she had promised ...

Hey, I just thought I would point out some errors. I gave her a small,, Where'd that second comma coem from? But most of the time she pretended like I ...

If you plan to continue, you should really stick to one tense.

Topaz yawned and lied down close to me. It's "lay" in this instance. Simple mistake.

Her eyes shined The past tense of "shine" is "shone". Coming to a halt, fragile look hands I think what you meant here was "fragile-looking" hands. It isn't a glaring ...

Hello there, I'm Stori. And you're Amandine (nice name). Have to go; shall see you later!

Well, what genre do you write? Do you enjoy H.G. Wells' work?

Hi Mirror, I just thought I'd point out a couple small errors. those lovely girl’s shoes. If it's more than one girl, the ' goes after the s: girls' shoes. ...

Welcome. Can I take your coat? Thanks. While you're here, don't forget to visit our chatroom, the Lounge. You can get there from the main page or the 'YWS' icon. ...

Hello to you as well.

after all the effort. "All that effort"; don't worry so much about it though.

he’d shouted at me. He’d shouted at me and my little sister Sophie. You may want to fix this.

who inhabited her domain. Up till now, you never referred to the lake as "she." I did as I was bade, I'm fairly sure this ought to be "as I ...

You seem to have misplaced the "Y" in "Every".