Stori

I have to respectfully disagree. I don't think an impersonal force like the "universe" could create itself. And if the universe is everything, where do signs and wonders come from? ...

Bravo! *applause* There were a few errrors but overall very good. And the city went up, in raging seas of smoke, Delete the comma. Two small brothers with no where ...

I think everyone else covered the basics. So, I'll just say you've inspired me to write in my own journal.

One thing I think you should know: the name of a ship is usually put in italics.

It's not bad actually. You broke the rhyme scheme at the end of the second stanza. For if mine is chosen, so are all; And self-knowledge is no chain alone.

My ideal storybook? One where two members don't invade it with romance. :(

Tired? Me? *looks up blearily* Yup, I guess you could say so. Anyway, I stayed up all night watching The Lord of the Rings, so...

I like writing about cats. But how exactly do you tell a story with them that hasn't been done before?

Silence is good. It's our friend.

The character- if that's what he was- smiled. "I can get you out of here." There's something very familiar about him, I thought. Let me see: deep purple eyes, a ...

I hadn't mean to say that, but it walked out of my mouth before I could stop myself. You broke with the present-tense there. I notice that tends to happen. ...

This was very good. But shouldn't it be in Nonfiction?

I think it's good. Although, I was wondering if you mean "wind-capped sky" in stanza two.

Um. This could use quite a bit more description. What did the crowd look like? Were there multiple nationalities there? Did Willam look confident, annoyed, eager, what? Try answering those ...

Hi Rael. If you want you can look at my story, Phoenix. It's in progress and I have the first chapter up.