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Not bad, Fairy. Just one thing I'd like to point out. [quote] He stared up at the same part as Octa's.[quote] That's a little jarring. Something like, "His eyes went ...

No replies yet? Shame, I say! The story made me laugh, and the quotes were well-done. I'd give it an A+.

Thanks Nariel. And about the name, I think it should be pronounced "seven." What do you think?

Add me to your group! lol I just write things as they come. Which means I have a lot of ideas, but nothing in order. Ugh.

Ok, you go to a grammar school but your folks want you to go into law? Anyway, I'm Kyte. Or Jorin. Nice to meet you Eimear!

"Student number 242, come forward!" Cevan groaned. A reprimand on top of last week's detention meant another lecture from Dad. Not to mention the point loss... 'The Value of Education, ...

Not bad, but you should leave out the space between lines.

That's a good question. The idea is that a miasma covers the world. You, as a caravan member, collect 'myrrh' to protect your home from miasma.

Granted, but the only people who notice you are nerds. I wish I had a million bucks to spend at Borders.

Unfortunately, he wouldn't give it up.

I expected the boy's parents to tell hime someone he knew died. Nice surprise, though. Is there more to this?

Wait just a minute. If they're using laser weapons, would they need to reload? You might want to think about that.

"Where are we... Good question." I looked around the room. "It looks like we landed in the Young Writers' Society." I smiled at his bemused look. The link looked impossibly ...

Unfortunately, his umbrellas were too small for me.

Thanks guys. And yeah, I love Warriors. I do have one idea. I'll show you as I post "Marcus and Mica." :lol: You'll have to wait to find out.