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It's simple: remove any mention of your name, then everyone guesses who you are. Or it could be your characters, not you. Leave clues in the post: a catch phrase ...

I like this, very original. Just one error I spotted. there was something--an itch?-- The first time you used a solid dash (an em dash I think) and the second ...

What I liked- the cats' names. They're different from the usual Warriors names but follow the same tradition. What I didn't like- some of the dialog is more modern and ...

Again, a good job of making this feel like a Warriors book. I spotted a few typos but nothing major. The course sand scraped the pads of her feet Coarse ...

'Ello. and doesn't a rude comment make anyone's blood boil?Well Space between the question mark and W. I'm practically a black pudding. Full stop right there. Please help!? It isn't ...

He glanced outside at the raging weather, the lightning made him nervous. Replace the comma with a semicolon. That shows two complete thoughts are expressed in one sentence. Here too: ...

"What now Brightpaw?" Comma after now, I'd say. Brightpaw seemed unphased, "Come on Brightpaw!" Put a full stop after "unphased." And another comma after "on." All in all, I like ...

You won't hate me for this? A girl who slips a penny to anyone she likes. I know, it's stupid.

You're in good company, Demeter. We're all a little crazy here, but we're good crazy. Joke. 'nyway, don't forget the guidelines, have fun and stay on the mods' good sides. ...

My style is to either use a common name or totally make something up. With the second, though, I find a lot of them are already done. *shrugs*

7/10. Not a Harry Potter fan, but that was funny.

Hey, I don't bite. Just wanted to ask, what's this 'AA?'

Hello, Leah. I'm Kyte, aka Jorin.

And so, silent He became. Don't end the sentence there. It's not complete. He abides in the void, Aided by two. His bow, And his quiver. Might work better as, ...

In the top line you say the guy left 'five years ago' but the bottom says 'three.'