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Here goes then. Jessica quickly dropped Malik's hand, it had been necessary for the teleport, but holding it longer would give the others ideas. That would work better as, "Jessica ...

I finally find a thread on Pern, and it's deserted. Anyone want to start this again?

First up, I think you don't need so many exclamation marks. There are ways to show excitement without 'em. There you will my spirit in shackles. You left out a ...

A wolf’s howl broke the silence over Mourner’s Peak. Jake shivered and pulled his cloak tighter around him. Flickering embers made shadows of his features. Seeing the youth’s reaction, Bran ...

Ok, I shall be your first critiquer. I dart my mother an evil glare as I head up the stairs slamming the door on the way. Also, a comma after ...

Maybe they don't have names unless they do something important. That's an interesting idea. How did you come up it, Griff?

Well, Glad, we meet again. Feeling hopelessness begin to worm it's way Its alert there! How am I supposed to make it through Gerudo's Desert?' Since this isn't it a ...

I'm no photography critter, but I like the turbine and the lava slabs over water.

Wow, that was great. I caught only one or two minor errors. I assure you; I would not betray the government. I think the semicolon could be a comma. sludge-brown ...

Dumb question: What is the M15?

I'm looking for a good name for a male griffin. Anyone have ideas?

Hi MJ, I've met your friend. Call me Jorin. Looks like Spell Check doesn't like either of our our names.

"Paradise," I muttered. "There's no such thing." Still, my fingers hovered over the "install" button. It's just another game. Don't sweat it... But what about the rumors? Almost of its ...

You did a good job with this, Do. I found some errors, but they're easy to fix. "He's kind of annoyed." Jake whispered into my nightshirt. A comma usually goes ...

Let me just say, this needs more showing. As it is, the text reads more like an essay than a novel.