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Um. I can only repeat what the other person said. Except to say that I'm glad you came back.

I have a question. Do you have to sign up again each year, or not?

Another thing: if it's fantasy or science fiction, don't be afraid to use the "misspelling of nouns" trick. That's my two cents.

I always thought that taking a long time was a good thing.

Kin Like an echo to my thoughts, I heard the sounds of conflict. I hurried over to join the crowd. "Do you want to be known as player-killers just starting ...

It's real good. No mistakes that I can see, and you conveyed the characters' feelings well.

Well, I only spotted a few errors here. It's noting major. When we appeared at Oriana's house Maybe you meant to say "arrived?" No this can't be happening. Comma after ...

Does anyone know what the condition is called where your neck muscles spasm? All i know is, I have it, and no one helps me with it.

Actually, I wasn't going "what the heck." It's more like, "This is very original."

This isn't bad. There are some mistakes, but they're easy to fix. For instance: We battled till the sages sing. "Sing" doesn't fit because it's present tense. But duty gave ...

I actually caught only one error here. He tried to focus on all three, but cannot. Tried clashes since it's past tense. An innocent typo, I'm sure. Otherwise this is ...

Well. Welcome to the site, and don't worry about what to post. Just remember: two reviews per new topic.

First off, I noticed you used the names Ryan and Amelia. Which is ok, I'm just pointing that out. Next, when it talks about the game company the story lapses ...

When I opened my eyes, there was a busy town square around me. Several people were gathering around a player who was shouting, "Try your luck folks!" This is weird. ...

I didn't understand that something was wrong until the MC suddenly burst into tears. To tell you the truth, I thought it was really random. But good job.