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I hate to take the wind our of your sails, but the prologue has a hysterical feeling to it. this was clearly not the time for dancing, and I was ...

Are you kidding? Of course I'm interested! I can't find any mistakes, so I'll just say that this is a good beginning.

Of gushing waters and quilted mountains. Sewn together with strands of brown. Nix the first period. That's all the grammar stuff I could find. Overall, this is very good.

Who doesn't have a YouTube account? I don't. Anyway, welcome to the site.

He throws his hands up for balance and leans into the wind. She shouts and hollers and yells Is the character a he or a she? We pillow our heads ...

My name was Adelaide Molyneux, What do you mean, her name "was"? Father often tried to restrain my wonders. I think it should be "wondering" or "curiosity." truth be the ...

"There has to be some other way," Shad protested. "I don't have fine control; if I melt the chains I might burn us all." Ballow groaned quietly. "What kind of ...

Shad opened his eyes slowly. He was in a cell. With a lurch he sat up. "I see you have come around." It was the first time he'd heard Torn ...

Plot: In the far future, humans find a "Rosetta stone" from an alien culture. It shows them many aspects of science that they had no knowledge of. They used the ...

quote]It is like crocodile skin made into fancy ladies' boots.[/quote] Love the imagery here. But you gotta look for it. This doesn't fit the style of the piece. Maybe try, ...

(You sure like to give us a sporting chance, Torn.) Shad Coughing, Shad backed away from the entrance. "It's no good. We could spend years trying to move that, but ...

Shad turned away. He was still thinking about the fire. Would he dare use it to protect his friends? What if he had to choose between using it and dying? ...

"Oh, no," Shad muttered. "What happened?" asked Ballow, rubbing his head. "Sky healed you, but it took a lot out of her." Shad groaned. Now that the battle was over, ...

I really like this. It has a very clean, powerful feeling to it. [I on the other hand-- need to fly in my own direction[/quote] "I, on the other hand, ...

*irrelevant* You're Nate again? You trying to confuze me?