Stevie

Ooo... Thanks to me reading Beauty and the Beast last night my first thought was something similar to that. Or else someone who has this great flaw and has to ...

Thanks! I think Brother's Grimm. Which is, haha, rather grim. From the summary of your story, I'm not sure it is a fairy tale so much as fantasy. ^_^ But, ...

I'm writing a fairy tale (at least it falls into that category). I was wondering what do you think of when you hear 'fairy tale'? And what are some common ...

This is pretty good! I just have a question: 1. Is the Treasure supposed to be the Christian God? It did get confusing at times but it was a great ...

Yeah I know how that is.. I had these two great characters-- they were siblings. The only thing that was horrible was they didn't fit into the story, at least ...

Thank you everyone for criting! I made the changes to a copy on my computer. The first chapter should be up soon, I have it written I just need to ...

I have to agree with ShadowTwit when it comes to how spooky this piece is... But I liked it. The Good Things: - Well written, it got a little confusing ...

Really all I have to say is good, though there are a few things that can be added but not for lack of a great writer. The Good Things: - ...

I'll stick to basic stuff: I have edited and looked through it, I think it's the best I can do without help. Grammer and spelling (though I have used spell ...

Ummm... Very Interesting. I liked it overall good plot, characters need a little work I'd like to read a little more about them. A little background info would be nice ...

Here's Chapter Two! Hope you enjoy! Um... anything in Italics is translated and if there is anyone out there who speaks french check the french part for me I would ...

Thanks guys for the critics! Eleinasari - That is really helpful, thank you! I wrote this piece as a way to get rid of my writers block and to rewrite ...

I know right now it doesn't seem fantasy but it is, just it doesn't come in until Chapter 2 or 3. I want honest opinions even if it's harsh. Underline ...

I got to say Awesome story, but (yes I know the terrible but) it's very ordinary, well your main character is at times. I mean I've read so many stories ...

Tzmanda - Glad you like it. Lilyy03 - Thanks for the help, I edited it and made the changes you suggested. (BTW the meaning of 'they' was supposed to be ...