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I fix'ted the timestamp, I sowwie. I am also open to my character getting wounded, badly even, but I of course would like to keep her around for longer. Sidenote: ...

Day 1, 7:30 a.m. - Lamiaferox Lamia woke to the ringing and vibrating of two cell phones, two of the five that she now claimed as her own. She stretched ...

Full Name: Lamiaferox Jasmine Fredirckson Gender: Female Age: 19 Birthplace: Westchester, NH Job: N/A Eyes: Black Hair: Mostly waist long blond, with some random shorter areas, strung with beads, crys

Lovely poem. I like how you go about conveying what you feel. I however do not see this as a story, but maybe you can point out to me how ...

Great poem, lots of emotion, lots of lines to make a person think. I have found some issues, mostly clarification, and grammar problems. Otherwise, fantastic job. We were all best ...

[pre]Devastated heart, lost in pain: Warmed and awoken once again. Smiles and laughter coincide, She loved him back, hard to hide. The more about him she did learn, More of ...

I know what it's like, to be a teenager, my love. are you speaking to a lover? a daughter? What? can't tell with this line I was caught for firsts, ...

I disagree highly with the person who said that the last two lines were a letdown, those were the lines that summed up the poem and gave me a laugh. ...

I do love how this poem plays out, but it does not seem much a narrative, though I wish it were one. Lots of people say they love how short ...

This line here: like a vile, self-sufficient plant. I am not sure if I would use the word plant here. Plant seems to be a pleasent word, a word used ...

In this quote specifically, but all throught I think there are tense errors. Then you tap me on my shoulder, I turned around and then I see, The first line ...

I happen to agree with the others that some punctuation, and some stanza break-up is needed for this poem. I had a hard time keeping track of what line I ...