Starleene

I loved this based soley on the fact that it didn't rhyme. You moved your story along in a natural flowing way. I loved it, Keep writting :!

Your lies are all coming back. swirling around and around Never ceasing too amaze me that I believed every one. I stand here now wishing I had seen your lies; ...

Like posters' before me said capitalize your "I's". This was a really great poem, very straight forward. If you really read it and let it sink in, I think this ...

I play my part well With a forced smile; no one knows. With bottled emotions; no one suspects. With dry eyes, no one guesses. No one askes, "Are you ok?" ...

This was pretty good, but I really don't like the rhyming. It restricts all the possibilities that you would have without it, you know. I really like where your going ...

A broken heart The tears start to fall. there's no stopping it sorrow my heart befalls Lets be friends You'll move on my heart is torn stepped upon The other ...

Im Back!!! This was amazing, but you know that already so..anyway I didn't catch to many flaws, acually I caught none. :) I want to know what is bothering the ...

Hi Hi I'm Back! OK so the above reviewers have done a pretty good job of getting the grammer and researching things. Hm i would suggest that you take there ...

Hey! I love the conversation between the boy and his mother. It seems like something that any kid would say to his or her mother. But about the part where ...

DAMMIT! Try to use all caps sparingly, but its best not to use all caps at all. Up in the front row, the other Catholic kids started crossing themselves too. ...

Hey I think that these are great. One piece of advise I have though, don't take photos out of windows and moving veicles, unless thats the kind your going after. ...

Ok so just a couple questions: Is the point of view from a girl or a boy. And second what made they person go crazy and start on a killing ...

Oh Snap! That was great:) I haven't read many stories in 2nd person, but I'm glad i read yours. It was so worth it. No grammar errors. Punctuation was perfect, ...

Dim morning light drifted through the purple curtains. I stared engrossed as tiny dust motes flitted around in an intricate dance until vanishing on the edge of the light. A ...

Hey, thank you so much for the reviews. The MC's name is Claire, Cameron says her name :smt003 and I know it needs work, it was the spur of the ...