Starhunter

I hope they even out... I keep getting stuck, at which point I go back and work on backstory! Or other parts I skipped before. Luna and Rima aren't linked ...

Yeah, there is a lot of backstory that has yet to be presented... Miirsti (where the Queen lives now) isn't actually her home, and as for marrying the King, it ...

Ah! I know, that's always the danger of using someone else's POV to introduce a main character. Rima's important-ish, but I just haven't done anything with her yet... in the ...

{Chapter 2- Rima's POV. Rima lives in the kingdom next door to Zanni, where Coron lives. This occurs the same day or soon after Chapter 1} ~ Switch: Rima of ...

[Like I said before, this story switches point of view often, usually between the two main characters. Iulia isn't one of them, but this is her POV. This is the ...

Hey! This sounds good to me- I haven't read chapter one or anything, but now I'm really interested. I think your conversations are very natural and flow well, and could ...

Hi! In my opinion this isn't cliche at all, and I think you are taking an original spin on the vampire thing. It's very original, I think, to see the ...

Thanks people for your input! :) Do you have any ideas for how I could fit in descriptions, while still being subtle? I mean, the story is being presented from ...

This sounds really interesting to me! :) Where would I find these, if/when you post them?

[This is set roughly four years before Fire and Shadow: Part 1. It's still the same story though.] No one had visited the grotto for centuries. Nothing had disturbed it ...

[This is set about four years before Fire and Shadow: Part 1. It's still part of the same story, though.] No one had visited the grotto for centuries. Nothing had ...

Hey! I really liked this- I haven't read any other parts of this story, so I wasn't quite sure what was going on, but I still was able to connect ...

Yeah, the eight-year thing... I think was trying to throw in a bit of native accent there. But I can see where that would be confusing, so I'll change it, ...

Hey! Cool, a superhero story. :) I like your intro- you jump right into the story. And you really cover right away one of the things that is very intrinsic ...

{Author's note: this novel is written from several points of view, by people in different places. When I change, I often mark it with ~switch~. Just so you know. There's ...