Starhunter

Hey! I really liked this selection. I haven't read the rest of the story, but now I really want to. I was pulled into the story instantly, and I found ...

Hey! Okay, so here are my thoughts.. I really like the voice you're using. It's very personal, and it's easy to connect with. I feel like I just met Avelyn ...

Hey! Okay, so here are my thoughts.. I really like the voice you're using. It's very personal, and it's easy to connect with. I feel like I just met Avelyn ...

Thanks everybody for the input! I really appreciate it! :)

Wow- thanks so much you guys for all your input! It really helps! I am doing my best to keep writing, and actually I'm near the end... although that could ...

Under five feet, short light brown hair and bangs. Used to wear glasses but has contacts now. Likes to wear black, but with a dash of color... although I may ...

Under five feet, short light brown hair and bangs. Used to wear glasses but has contacts now. Likes to wear black, but with a dash of color... although I may ...

Yes, that helps, thanks! Ha, my problem is Iulia is older, she's just not very... mature, I suppose. Matronly she is most definetly not. She is used to always getting ...

Hi! Well, reading it through the first time, I was totally in it. I really liked the flow of it, and even though it was really short, I was so ...

Wow. What a jerk! Oh my gosh- that was really, really good. I didn't notice any grammar/spelling things, and your entire flow was good as well. Very, very clever too. ...

~ Switch: Luna ~ Luna wandered, her heart beating faster at every noise. She had stopped running a while before, and she had been walking hurriedly, constantly turning and craning ...

I have a question though- does anyone have any ideas about how to get across Iulia's age? She's actually quite young, and I just want to get that across... she ...

Hey! Just so you know, I haven't read the other parts of this, so I'm reviewing it on its own. So, this was a little long, so I won't be ...

Hi! Very interesting story, very poetic. Your phrasing floats like the clouds and airships you write about. However, there are a few things: A lot of your phrasing is confusing. ...

Wow, very nice! I really like the swirling kind of look in the hair and feathers- and actually, just everything, overall, looks awesome. My only critiques are: 1) The feathers(?) ...