StarDuster

I really really liked this, as well. Yes it was a little hard to read... but that made it unique. I really liked the whole idea you had going through ...

This is continued from Experiment (new and revised!) . I apologize that it's so long, but I'm just trying to get it all on here. It's totally finished now, but ...

I, too, really liked this piece. You have a very unique style. The first two lines did seem a bit of an awkward way to lead into the poem, but ...

The title was what first caught my eye. So I decided to look into it. Then I couldn't stop reading. I would do some constructive criticism, but I can't think ...

I, of course, really liked this. A few little pointers, just so I'm helpful for once instead of only completely gushing :D (though I'm sure you can't mind that too ...

After thinking about it, I decided to revise and basically totally rewrite "Experiment". Now it's from the doctor's point of view. If you haven't read "Experiment" don't feel like you ...

thank you everyone!

This was really good. I liked how you made everything flow without feeling any need to rhyme or anything like that. The first stanza I really liked. It seemed the ...

All of these seem very deep. They are all very well-written and got me to thinking. I don't know how to critique them, but I just wanted to let you ...

This was very good, but I found these lines so close together seemed a little repetitive: No phrase can I find; No pigment can I find . If you could ...

I thought overall this was pretty good. You might want to watch your rhyming and also watch how the verses flow. You did a fairly good job for making it ...

Moonlit Waltz Waltzing a tap dance In a garden Made of moon-gleam Leaves of silver Wind-swept hair A single tear Glistening as it falls To frosted ground Dancing alone With ...

Thank you. That helped me alot. I will work on it as soon as I find the time. I hope I can improve it..

Thanks to everyone for welcoming me. I already know that I'm going to love it here. As for my interests, I'm of course big on writing. I also know a ...

Experiment Imagine: getting burnt beyond repair, but you can't feel it. Getting cut deeply, but you don't notice that you bleed. You always seem numb. You don't feel numb, you ...