Squishy

so intensly ironic its crazy... because.... I just did this in science today. whoo hoo. and you wouldn't fall off, because i doubt you would even get out of the ...

great awesome good good and good. you captured a great sense of fear and a wonderful mystery surrounding the monster thingies which I am still wondering about. this intro makes ...

okkeee dokeee. the only suggestion I have it that the whole bomb idea comes up a little sudden and random out of nowhere. If I was in a basement and ...

okay... i know you mentioned that this is supposed to be from a 6 year old's view and appologied it was too intellectual, but the language was too distracting. 6 ...

awesome awesome awesome.... but his falling in love with the girl was a little sudden. I mean, without a knowledge of his character, I kinda lurched into his sudden passion ...

about the twilight thing... I think all readers are still trying to get over their obsessive compulsive disorder with the book. I for one found it extremely hard to stop ...

name: joan age:16 occupation: whopper flopper looks like: classic nerd, but not with glasses. plain, tall, white, sunburned easy. mouse brown hair. braces. hott bod no makeup

cursing in stories is a huge red flag for emotion, and should't be taken lightly. when a character swears, it reveals one of two things -personality - or extreme emotion ...

delve deeper into the realm of your innocence which should make the creepy stalker dude seems much more filthy. capitalize on this opportunity for a foil. could be great

don't compare yourself to famous authors but do compare yourself to yourself. writing is like golf, your only competitor is the score you got last week

try no title. books are better without being revealed pre-maturely. like those little summary things onthe inside covers of novels: annoying. and no one should be judging the book by ...

not to rain on your parade or anything, but you portray pamela as a shy short person who might possibly be a nobody to the jocks/popular people of the school. ...

that sucks.... it is cliche though, but i have a feeling it could get interesting witha little attention to the plot. what's it like from darchie's point of view?

writing stories fromt he bible... quite creative... kudos

really good, i got into it (actually) i'm not really a zombie person but even in my adversity was it entertaining. im not a gore person either, but you might ...