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I liked your story. Good descriptions and well thought out setting. I can't really relate myself to your characters yet but I believe I will soon. That's all I have ...

I started reading the prologue slowly until I came to the word "elves." Then I just scanned it and I thought to myself...this sounds cliche. Ask yourself, out of all ...

It was good. Not my type of read but still good. I liked how you build up the fact that a missing character could had been a demon. However, your ...

I like to thank Ending Karama. If it wasn't for you mate, I wouldn't have pushed myself to my limit in developing the story to it's fullest potential. Thank you ...

Until now, I have yet to type the word naive. I apologize for critiquing it. I'm not trying to start a bash war here, so I'm hoping (assuming) that we ...

This isn't cliche. Period. I loved the way how the descriptions all join together to create a picture of a mass funeral. I see you had to use all the ...

Maybe it's just because fantasy fiction isn't my cup of tea, but I didn't really get into this. It was mildly enjoyable, but that's stretching it a tad for me. ...

Hrmm when I read your story, I had to force myself to read it. Like it contained a lot of meaningless information which just drags the story. That's the reason ...

When I first read feels like a chore.. Don't include the histroy until at least chapter 2. And I also don't like the idea of the "purebloods" I mean if ...

Prologue Small ripples slowly glided up and down the beach, giving out little splash like sounds as they hit the crevices between the pebbles that ran the full length of ...

The father inspected the child. Instantly Valdor's father know that the baby was not of the elven race. The father asked if Valdor knew anything of the parents or who ...

Thank you Rieda and Ktk. Anyhoo, I have made a few more edits to prologue and ch 1 and I have posted a bit of chapter 2. Please crit on ...

Boo yeah I managed to answer "no" to all my questions. Hehe. Now to continue writing my novel "God mode turned on"

Lol this is what I look like now

I liked the storyline. It was interesting to an extent. However I had two concerns. I didn't liked the fact that the story flowed on from conversations. I personally believed ...