Squall

Hi Pol. The first thing I noticed when I read this was the start was kinda abrupt. In the morning Knall climbed out of bed slowly, still processing the information ...

Sup Chey. I was caught off guard so easily. It cannot happen again. Don't tell us how she felt. Show us lol. They were just out of sight of the ...

Hi Scribe. On the forest floor scurried a murmuring, shimmering stream filled with clear, cold water. Too many adjectives. I can already picture the stream. I dunno why you needed ...

The quiet crunching of snow filled the night. Step by step, Crystal walked in heavy footfalls, seeming to sink deeper each time. Excellent! Sets the mood of the story straight ...

The first one had that symbolic feel to it. It's felt as though it is intended for a certain theme. I liked how the trees are like shadowy. It intensifies ...

I love the first one so much. Never had I seen the sun create a orange redish haze like that in the sky. The last one was good too. The ...

This was good. I like how you did a back view of them instead of a front view. Adds more mystery to them. The holding hand thing also adds more ...

The idea to this is good but I wasn't really impressed with this overall. It felt kind of rushed and I did not feel a connection with your story. You ...

I like the idea to this. The beginning is kind of info dumpy. I think you should rephase it a bit. Just make sure that this piece isn't over the ...

Haha I like! Girl pirates have always rocked my boat. Guys are getting too old for the job:)

I think this works well with a rap background. Some of the lyrics don't really work well (e.g:I'm not your boomerang) I dunno, probably because a boomerang isn't really human ...

The rhyming in this needs some work. Otherwise, the lyrics seem very appropiate for this song. Good work.

I think the lines "hush little baby" seems a bit overused. I also don't know what the exclaimation marks are for. I kinda figured this was like a rock song ...

Oh my god! I love cardcaptor sakura. It's one mean anime. Anyways, I liked how you used the colours. The thumb for the hand seems a bit off though but ...

I like Shiva. It's quite original and the design for it rocks.