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Hi there Dawn. Your descriptions in this piece were shown ok, but it lacks colour and variety. It's just generic fantasy stuff really. From the way you described the tower ...

Hey there FireArris. Personally, I would keep the opening statements, because it is quite a clear explaination as to what is happening and to be honest, I quite liked the ...

Hey there. I'll keep this short and straight to the point. The first paragraph is a cliche. It's not because that it is an info dump, but how it is ...

Hey Ash. Firstly, I think this could go with more showing than telling. You told us of what is happening and all that kind of stuff but I can't really ...

7/10 The animation is cool but the wolf and the night sky isn't very appealing to me.

Lol 7k in a day. I can't picture myself doing that.

Hey Ariel. I would like to start off by saying that I did not like this. It didn't leave me with much of an impression so it was medicore at ...

Hey there Syd. First of all, I would like to say sorry as my critique will not help you address issues like punctuation and capitalization as that can be easily ...

Hey Flora. Overall, I appreciated the effort that you invested into this piece and I like it, somewhat. However, it didn't really command my attention, mostly due to the prose ...

Flora, I did not like this poem. It is too sterotypical for my tastes and to me, it feels like a rewrite of the ideas that already exist in our ...

Hi there Pie. First of all, I like to say that I didn't like this piece because of one reason: It isn't creative. To me, you basically took a common ...

Ok Flora, first of all, I'm not a fan of critiquing poetry simply because poetry is a very diverse art form and hence takes a lot of effort to review. ...

Hi there Ayra. Alright, I have read most of your fantasies that you've posted on the fantasy forum, and I have to say that there is something that bugs me ...

Hey Jiggity. First off, I like to say that I really like this. The way you worded this story was simply one of the best that I've seen on yws. ...

I also need to get that game too. After I finish MP3: Corruption on hypermode difficulity first :)