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Hey there man. I haven't seen you at all around these forums. Welcome to YWS and we hope you'll stay with us forever :twisted: I'll be your reviewer for today. ...

One’s love for the world Derek, that’s my name and this, is my story. It starts on a day like any other; average day, average problems, average life. While everything ...

Hey Mr Jigglypuff. I did promised to review this when I was chat. Sorry that I took so long, I was busy with school work and stuff. You'll noticed that ...

Hey there Lucy. Well I did promised to get around to doing this. So here we go. A small trickle of water fell from the gutter along my roof and ...

I'm going to give this a star. I feel inspired looking at this. It's like she's twirling her soul/ life energy as a weapon, like a pair of bolas. If ...

Hey guys. Well I have a creative writing assessment due in two weeks time and I've already started writing for it. Basically, we are to write a short 400-500 piece ...

Hey there Vernon. You asked and I'm here to deliver the verdict. Rain crashed down against the window, followed by muffled rumblings and bright incandescent flashes. The old General scratched ...

Hey Adam. Sorry if my critique of this chapter was a bit delayed, I was tired last night and decided to hit the sack. I've printed chapter 14 out and ...

Hey there. The poem doesn't really have a specific purpose or message that you are trying to convey. To me, they seem to be a bunch of metaphors and similies ...

Hey there Camille. Sorry if I haven't reviewed your work earlier. I'm quite busy lately with life and school work. So I apologize. Ok you've pmed me to check this ...

Hello Camille. I see that you summoned me to critique the revised version. Well here I am. Lets roll. My pelt begins to prickle, but I do not move; my ...

Just to let you know, I'm only suggesting that you should try using extended metaphors as you seem to be the person that uses metaphors quite a bit. Don't be ...

Hey there Valor. I'm supposed to be doing my poetry analysis essay, but I thought that I should critique this first. You are that important :) The line went all ...

Vivi...I am now your loyal servant. Command me at your will mistress! "bows"

Hello! Disappointing Camille, calling me a random member on my guest book "face/palm :cry: ". Here we go: Thud. The arrow flew straight and true, feathers flashing in the mid-morning ...