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Hey there. As the bright picturesque sun lit their face I found myself mesmerised, I had never experienced a feeling of such an idealist nature. Not really a good hook. ...

Hey Adam. The hesitance boomed like a fog horn. I'm not really a fan of this simile; how is a fog horn related to the title of "heat"? That sharp ...

Hello stranger! Welcome to my shop! What are you buying? But seriously, all I can offer you are free critiques. If you know me, I can be a critical critiquer ...

It takes me almost two weeks to edit my creative writing assessment which only has 680 words to it. Yes, I'm such a perfectionist lol.

I love how when somebody even just mentions Eragon/Paolini we all just jump at it =D It's so amazing. Following what she said, I'm sure there are other authors who ...

Hey there. This is a free critique that you get for participating the contest. Enjoy. Sparks popped into being, fireflies breaking free and surviving for a few seconds before being ...

Thanks for the critiques guys. I've edited the piece throughly and I believe that it is much more clearer and conscise than the 2nd draft. I hope you'll enjoy it. ...

Hey there JCobsesed :D When you turned your head to hear my voice, or brought your hands to your face for the first time. I cried in joy for you, ...

that like a new pokemon from a new pokemon series? Or did you just make him up?

Hrmm thanks for your critiques guys. Phorcys: I'm glad that you've decided to read another of my works. Thank you. :D The purpose of the piece is to write a ...

Hey Kenpachi. Serena jumped off the boulder and started off for Fian at full stride, “I didn't realize you were such a crybaby-” Sevil jumped off the boulder and ran ...

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Hey Pingu. :D The hundreds of dresses are lined carefully, but tightly, next to one another, pressing together. You wonder, vaguely, if any will be of use before continuing your ...

Overeasy: You look sassy in the 2nd pic.

Thanks for the grammatical nitpick Jab Jab :D It was much appreciated. I've also taken the part where you are unsure as to whether they are teenagers or just in ...