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Are you on a high Heather? Me and Suzie? Omg lol.

Hello Flora. I think the main problem with the piece is that it's very jumbled and drawn out. Each paragraph seems to randomly portray something but it doesn't work with ...

The film was so good, I became addicted to one of Joker's phrases: "Why so serious? :twisted: " Watched it on imax with my friends :D

Hello rosethorn. We had Tom turn up the music loud enough so that he couldn’t hear us talking to each other. You introduce Tom rather suddenly. This is kind of ...

Hello Fellow. He was crushed and Ashea’s voice was calling him in vain. A thread of blood was streaming down his half-opened mouth and then onto his cheek. The dreadful ...

Hello Pingu. They're things that break and get replaced until they break again. I like this. It reflects how whores would keep going for different people. It's a clever extended ...

No, the purpose of the pendant from what I've read is solely to indicate to the audience that it is angelic. The same message can be communicated by simply adding ...

I don't get why you would waste words describing the pendant itself. It's so long winded and unnecessary. You can say that it's beautiful and it would hold the same ...

Hello readers. I have an english exam coming up this week and I'm preparing for it by writing practice essays for the texts that we studied in class. I would ...

Hello KJ. I think you are on the right track in writing it in first person and attempting to humanize wolves. However, it lacks depth and never really has a ...

Hello JabJab. A distant growl rumbled over the distance between her and the storm, but she paid no mind. A distant growl rumbled over the distance between her and the ...

Hello Esme. Master Pillet was a person positively viewing the world around him, with the prized ability to crush, likewise cuticle, any court opponents in the Great Grand Hall vicinity. ...

If you are going to have elves in your story, you must ask yourself this: Why am I having elves in my fantasy? What purpose do they serve? Having elves ...

4. Prefer to just lend books out of the library. Saves $$

Yeah the opening was really good. I was playing an MMORPG when it was on and I found myself focusing much more on the tv than the game (and I'm ...