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Feeling sexy eh Overeasy? Bittersweet: haha, the baby is cute as

I'll just clarify some of my points. I don't quite follow what you're saying. I need more sensory imagery, but not imagery with the eyes- So, I need to include ...

Castlesinthesky: Wow, you really are pretty. :D Layleun: You are pretty too. Nice costumes by the way. I've only posted in this thread once. Guess I should do so again. ...

Hahhaha. Still can't get past the fact that you seem a bit girly Conrad? Man I feel like doing a fanfic based on YWS now I think you should had ...

Hi there Shadow, I'm back again 8) With serpentine speed he went to grab it, but as he did a bicep slammed into his chin and threw him off the ...

I always tell myself that I don't read enough, because the only books I would have read this year would have been ones that were obligatory for school work, which ...

I joined YWS because I like to be able to create something that no one else has. It gives this strange feeling of satisfaction, knowing that what you made belongs ...

Hehe. Welcome to YWS. Yeah that happens with those that aren't into the craft. It's probably because they do not know what's wrong with the piece or that they can't ...

Hehe. Hello Pingu. Rap on the knuckles, mister, wear the dunce hat now. I assume this refers to God but this bit stuck me as kind of odd. I think ...

Hi there. I think the problem with the piece is that there isn't much happening. About 3/4 of the piece is about Maryse encouraging the narrator to look at the ...

Hello. The night was deathly silent and besides the harsh breathing of the woman it appeared as if there were no other living things present. Run on sentence. Try using ...

I don't get it. Why should we care about where the elf-like race's powers are derived from? Fantasy should be about making the implausible plausible and being able to express ...

Hello there. I won't be giving a line to line critique on this. Instead, I'm going to give you some of my knowledge and hopefully it will encourage you to ...

What's up JC? It's been a while. When I can home two nights before her television show was to be aired, the house was dark and quiet, with every light ...

Hello. I printed this out and was reading it while I was having lunch. Here are my notes: Joanna looked around the vast chamber that imprisoned her. Describe the chamber. ...