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Hey there Sureal :D I did say that I was going to critique all of this series. I'm a man of my words. If this is because of alcohol, Leo ...

Minus 10 points for mocking Twilight in a fanfic. Na joking. I think there should had been more interaction between Bella/Edward with other characters. It could had been extended further ...

Hey day tripper. I think the piece focuses too heavily on the physical descriptions of the characters rather than the actual relationships of characters and/her the characterization of the novels. ...

Hi there Inksplatter, and welcome to YWS. What do you think of it so far? Anyways, I printed this out during lunch and read it while waiting for my noodles ...

Hey Raimura. 8) I personally don't like this poem. It reads more like a rant that I would find in someone's blog from Bebo, MySpace, FaceBook etc. It's written with ...

Explanation for the word Goddess being thrown in there is fairly simple. The narrator of the poem would be myself, when I do as for spiritual guidance then I ask ...

I don't see why you should be upset that you lost the bet Spring, you are pretty.

I couldn't agree more, Jig. You're lucky you don't live in the US; I heard about Twilight the entire ride to school this morning. :x If I were to ever ...

Whoa Sureal, didn't you once had an emo fringe? Looking good though man. I finally managed to borrow my mum's camera. :D

Emma: Dang! I'd kill for a room like that. Gwen: Whoa, you look a lot more grown up now.

Hey Overeasy. What's up. Your first two lines introduce the poem well and establishes the metaphor in the poem. However, the next four lines seem rather useless. They are merely ...

Hello Vivi. I believe I did said that I would help you out a bit to get you back on track. Anyways, you need to make it more clear to ...

Vivi, try writing to express an idea or theme to the audience. A lot of writers write to simply express their views. For example, in "The Lovely Bones", one of ...

Hey there StolenHearts, how are you? Endless streams of tears ran down their cheeks as they looked at me in my casket. Endless? Do you think people would cry endlessly? ...

Yay, Vivi is back. You better stay for good this time eh?