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Hi there. The outline of the left egg doesn't look as smooth as the one on the right. As a result, this makes the left egg seem disfigured in a ...

Hello Ash. It was in the middle of the night. Describe the night more. It was a cheap, dirty place. How? Describe. She looked out of the window, observing the ...

Lol Dreamer, why are there stumps on the beach? I think you should soon the camera out more in the first picture. It's too close in. The same with the ...

Hey lucyy. I don't think you need a preface. All this can be shown in the first chapter of your novel. Why would need to introduce to us prior to ...

Hey there Mutant, and welcome to YWS. Are you a Mutant Teenage Ninja Turtle? Lol. Anyways, what type of short stories do you write and why do you write them? ...

Hey there Nariel. Firstly, you do not need the prologue. A prologue should only to provide historical background information of a novel prior to the start. (and even then, I ...

Hi carelessaussie13. Sickness had a smell. It was thick like honey, dusty like a summer without rain and acidic like the heavy stench of vinegar. You can't smell sickness. Sickness ...

I'm back from lunch. They told us to look away from the flames, I like your use of lines here. Having the image completed on the second line highlights the ...

Hey there Castles. I always like reading your works for some reason, they have that sort of strangeness to them. We draw thick outlines, try to make the colours suit. ...

Hi there Lex, and welcome to YWS. Nice picture you have there. :D I lay down in my bed trying to put him out of him head You mean "out ...

Hey there Dustfinger, and welcome to YWS. After reading your poem the first time though, I wasn't sure as to what message or theme you were trying to express here. ...

Hey there Rosey Unicorn. The cheer was soon being echoed throughout the grand hall. From my experiences, "echoed" are one of those words that novice writers would use to describe ...

Sup Kevsta, and welcome to YWS. I see you like family guy. Family guy for the win! The man whimpered in the corner of the cave. Blood seeped out from ...

Hey there Reason Invalid. I printed this out and was reading it during lunch. Here are some of my notes on it. The radio hummed fuzzily in the office. I ...

Round 3 little Teddiursa. “Your aunt and I have been looking for you for hours! Aly, tell us before you leave! You don’t know what sort of a man might ...