SporkPunk

Hi Paramore94. Welcome to YWS! Now, I didn't actually read this whole thing. It's really daunting. My suggestion to you is to post one chapter at a time. That way, ...

Hiya Story! I'm SporkPunk and I'll review this today. :D Grammar: It was lying Much, much easier to say "It lay." Also, it gets rid of passive voice, which is ...

Hey there Drago! I'm SporkPunk and I'll review this today. :D Grammar, wording and other things The sky, streaked with orange, was a lovely sight that morning. Don't TELL your ...

Hi funkymomo! Can I call you Momo? Welcome to YWS! Grammar: I found a few things, but nothing serious. Proofreading can take care of these errors. deviod Devoid. Just a ...

Hi Jaz! I'm Spork and I'll review this today. :D Okay, some people may complain about the fragmented lines, but I really liked them. They conveyed that uneasy tone...and the ...

Twiggers, Hi! I think you started this out fairly well. The flow was there, and I could follow the poem easily. However, in the middle, right around the mood transition, ...

Charmander, Haunter, and Ghastly look really cool. But what in the world happened to Oddish and Togepi? D: It's pretty cool to see stuff like that reimagined. xD

I only just saw this: English is not my mother tongue, That makes sense. Also, your written English is wonderful; I couldn't tell you weren't a native speaker. But now ...

Oh, right. It's due December 15th. Thank you very much! :D

Hey there Ollie! Well, I think the subject matter is interesting, and the imagery is good. However, I can't really discern any meter, which is okay if it's free verse. ...

Hey Luxy! Sorry this took so long, but I'm here as requested. :) Grammar: "Umm, Lea? What the fuck is going on?" I screeched. We'd stopped in front of a ...

I'm applying to the University of Maine (it's my safety school), I'll be attending the College of Liberal Arts and Sciences and, if I'm accepted, the Honors College in conjunction ...

This is probably going to be my college essay. Please, PLEASE, tear it up completely and rip it to shreds. I need it to be as good as it can ...

Hey there Jash! Sporky here as requested. :) Grammar and stuff: "No." I rolled my eyes and crossed my arms. " Just a typo here, but you don't need the ...

Hello silentpages! Grammar: Unfortunately, I only have one real nitpick with this, and it's really, really nitpicky. Everyone wanted to ‘capture the moment’, just like the news anchors told them ...