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Re: Apparition: The Game - Ch. 6.1
Thanks so much! I was trying out more descriptions this time (obviously) so thanks a lot for the feedback on that ~ (As for the second nitpick, he was more ...
Sep 13, 2015 -
Re: Apparition: The Game - Ch. 3.1
Thank you so much, Adri ~! ^^ This really helped.
Sep 13, 2015 -
Re: Apparition: The Game - Ch. 5
His father is indeed a doctor! (That was the first thing I read, because I read reviews disjointed xD) Thanks so much for the review! And as for the fact ...
Sep 12, 2015 -
Re: Apparition: The Game - Ch. 5
Yeah, this was also one of those chapters I wrote just to stay in LMS. :3 I get really see the feel of it slower and nothing happening -- which ...
Sep 12, 2015 -
Re: Apparition: The Game - Ch. 3.2
Yeah, Kyle's little fit was really downplayed, I agree xD There's a change going on next chapter that'll work with that a little, but I guess this is what editing ...
Sep 6, 2015 -
Re: simple
In poetry, you are allowed to bend the rules of grammar as it suites the voice or style of poem you want. Thanks for your review.
Sep 6, 2015 -
Re: simple
Thank you so much! ^^
Sep 5, 2015 -
Re: Syrin: The Warning - Pt. 1
Actually, Carsten doesn't have Syrin. Terri is not the name of his Syrin. Terri is the kind of magic he has and he just refers to it like it's a ...
Aug 31, 2015 -
Re: Apparition: The Game - Ch. 4.2
If anything, I'll just cut the last scene completely, because that was just me writing whatever came to mine xD And no, it's not mud/dirt on the drawing. I'll try ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Apparition: The Game - Ch. 4.1
This was definitely one of those scenes that I wrote something just to write it and stay in the contest xD Thank you for picking at Ms. Fergan!
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Syrin: The Warning - Pt. 3
Thank you so much! The confrontation I had particular trouble with, so thank you for pointing that out ^^
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Syrin: The Warning - Pt. 1
Thank you so much! Thank you for pointing out the directed audience -- I didn't even think about that xD (I also didn't even think about the parallel, which is ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Syrin: The Warning - Pt. 3
I was hoping I dropped enough hints throughout about how Carsten would die, like a vague picture. Like "Terri will become a monster who will make me do horrible things." ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Syrin: The Warning - Pt. 2
One note, I wrote this part on a iPad, and while I was writing this, somehow it all got deleted, so when I went back for the rewrite I was ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Syrin: The Warning - Pt. 1
Thank you so much! I was worried about the very thing you said about voice being too similar :3 So thank you for pointing that out! I'll play around with ...
Aug 30, 2015