SpencerNolanRivers

Yeah, I did accidently post twice, sorry 'bout that. My favourite genre has to be Realistic or Fantasy Fiction, and as for author, JK Rowling. No one can deny Harry ...

Yeah. Scott is Carah's boyfriend, and they end up breaking up at the end of the story. Thank you for the critiques, I will fix them later.

Oh, okay. I'll try re-reading and revising it the best I can.

...means to make you mean PRELUDE? Yes. [/quote]you probably need to re-read this and have a little alter...perhaps do that and then I'll come back...if i carry on now i ...

The glass was getting wetter in the inside [comma] but icy cold to the touch on the outside. Adding a comma between inside and but helps the structure of the ...

even the most successful and prolific writers now do, so who am I to argue? I know Stephanie Meyers does and it irks me to shreds! Lol...I did it because ...

“Hey, Kass, what’s up?” I asked as we crossed to the towering red door of the high school, pushing it with all my might and heading down long hall. “I ...

The reason I pull away is simple. Or is it? Sentence fragement. But what he hasn’t taken into account is the fact that I might not quite have reached the ...

Wow, that was really good. I don't see a lot of errors that need to be fixed besides the one's you've already corrected when you revised the story. Over all, ...

1. Good a good grade in Math next semester. 2. Finish this school year without losing it.

Edited, again PRELUDE One soul was not meant to be possessed by two poles, tugging each to it's own direction. A single heart does not bind naturally to dual sides ...

Archer and Cody should be more three-deminsional and developed.

The story was cute, but not great. The characters, especially the Archer and Cody, should have been developed more, they come off as two-deminsional.

It's hard to follow along to this story when the narrator constantly over-evaluates everything, reminds me of Bella in Twilight. Though, the concept of the short story is all right, ...

And here I was, all alone with him in the hallway. Oh God. Never start a sentence off with 'And,' it would make it a sentence fragement.