SpencerNolanRivers

I woke to the the dead silence of the on-going night. I do not understand how someone could be awakened by silence. It would've been much better if you had ...

Once inside , the aroma of coffee was so enticing he knew that he was going to spend his last dollar to have a cup. There should be a comma ...

well, in one word : awesome. There should be a colon. Bad, bad, bad. Not needed. Overall: I think the story is very cliche' and short. You should give us ...

There's some grammar errors here and there, but I didn't really feel like pointing them out. Maybe, if you went over the story you will find them and correct them. ...

Kristen Stewart always looks high. I guess it's part of her charm xD.

I am also from the the South. North Carolina, to be exact. I've been told that I do not have a Southern accent, which is sad, because I want one. ...

I had never really expected anything to happen between my best friend Carl and I . That fixes the sentence. I thought would be a train wreck waitin g to ...

I loved this story. I was planning on critiquing some grammar and everything, but nothing. Your piece is nearly flawless, I would say. I also loved the imagery you've used. ...

Cupcake is a thirteen-year-old girl not much taller than me with green hair , pale skin , and long eyelashes over purple eyes. There should a comma between "Hair," "Pale" ...

People Are Idiots "They could be coming any time now," He said. His eyes, as wide and as blue as oceans, held a look of fear. Loud clatter of hundreds ...

And one more thing. I hate feeling like I'm trying to start a debate or something, but I like the fact that you're using tags beside "he said" or "she ...

“I am not a ‘kiddo,’” I retort . It is best to just say "Said." “Right. You’re what, 9 or 10? You’re a big girl now?” he questions, "He" should ...

i've just got into House a couple of weeks ago while some re-runs were on, and i now love it. Thirteen has to be my favorite doctor, and Olivia Wilde ...

Option two. Geman rules. Und es ist viel spass!

" You are the only person that can make my heart beat faster and slower at the same time " - The Hot Chick If you are trying to convey ...