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Re: Let Me Love You(9)
I couldn't get half-way through the story without being irked by these mistakes; and when he finally came home for a two week break... That word should be inserted to ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Twilight Cliches
-How Edward it soo attached to Bella, and vice versa. -How Bella describes Edward as "Perfect" and "Beatufitul," yes, he is a vampire, but he has to have SOME flaws. ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Hello everyone. Does the word sex get your attention?
I love musicals as well. Then again, I am female xD.
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: What does this username make you think of?
Harry Potter's mother and father. KikiSaysRAWR!
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Post Your Pic Here [6]
Me in black & white, and at an angle.
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Shoulda Be Simple: Chapter 2
On the writing: You have really improved. Good job. On the plot: How come the characters are acting like someone being in love with their own cousin is no big ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: An Angel Without Wings
The girl calls herself Nicole. Why, at what age, and how? she found these clothes in the dump a long time ago. "This" should be changed into "These." We'll get ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: House
^^ All of the lastest season is being played back on Fox every Monday and Tuesday at 8PM.
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: When a Name Becomes Cliche
I think if you do not want to steer completely away from the name, but want to change it from it being too obvious, you should do research and look ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Billy Crane's Reaction.
I started to read and then I had to bring myself to a hault. There are a lot of mistakes in this script here. 1) You are not capitalizing the ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Solace From The Shadows (Chapter 1)
“Hi, can I have … a croissant and a … hot chocolate please? I really don't think the "..."s are needed, and it'd be best if you were leave them ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: On Letting Go
I don't think this is better than the last story I've done, but I still feel like posting this. On Letting Go "You are beautiful," I whispered gently to her. ...
Jun 27, 2009 -
Re: Harder Than You Know (Prologue)
A woman stands at the counter , making sandwiches. That comma there is not needed. She is tall, pretty , with long honey brown waves... I do not like how ...
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: Character Name Help...
I really like Annabelle, but maybe you would also like these suggestions: -Annalynne -Leighann or Leighanna -Clementine (sounds very cheerful to me) -Laurie (a very cute name) -Marie Claire
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: The Girl.
A car, about 500 miles away , d efinitely to o fast. It's best to just state "Miles," instead of abbreviating with a lowercase M. Secondly, the second sentence should ...
Jun 26, 2009