SpencerNolanRivers

overall. ok I am confused. there were too many flashbacks that you didn't point out were flash backs, also who kissed who? Olivias gay? We need more information, for the ...

Rated for language and sexual suggestiveness. I Hate Christmas Parties I grimaced at the ugly sight of the wreck which stood before my eyes. Festive bows laid all over the ...

Hi. My name is Kiara, and I'll be critiquing your work here. The thought of him made me so, so angry. There isn't a need for the second "so." No, ...

An Anti-Hero isn't necessarily a person that would do the opposite a normal hero would do. An Anti-Hero could also be the hero of a story, but flawed instead of ...

This writing analyzer informed me that I write like "Stephanie Meyer." I take much offense to this, and would like to understand what goes into these sort of analyzer-mechanisms, and ...

Fall Out Boy The Beatles 1997 and others that aren't at the top of my head right now.

This is the first 'chapter' (though, I wouldn't call it that) of a novel I've just began writing. I've posted this in the short story section, due to I not ...

Never describe someone as "Perfect."

Hey, there. My name is Kiara, and I shall be reviewing your entry right here, right now. Red = inserting something that should be there. Blue = a correction that ...

Hello, Again. Ugh, I know, not this girl again. Hahaha. I'll be reviewing this second chapter now, since I liked the first one so much. Glen put his headphones in ...

Hallo, ich bin Kiara. That is "Hello, I am Kiara" in the German language. I will be reviewing this chapter of your piece, here. Possibly, if I enjoy it a ...

Hello, I am Kiara. You can call me Kiki if you'd like, a lot of people do. I will be reviewing your story here. ...now he’s dumping me like a ...

Hello! My name is Kiara, and I'll be reviewing your work here. With a struggle , I pull myself back to the present to answer it. "Hello," I say way ...

Kiara :D Thanks so much for the help, I'll be sure to go and fix those things up. One thing though; ...flinging the doors open dramatically with a tiney ring ...

If you start a project that means something to you, go with it and forget every one's opinions. This is your story, or "info-dump", as Vanadis puts it. To me, ...