SpencerNolanRivers

Chocolate pancakes are just delicious. Even though I have only had them one, those were the best.

Please read the first two parts to fully understand this entry. You Soft and Lonely/You Lost and Lonely pt.III "Angelika," I said, glaring into her eyes that read that she ...

Had it really been a month? Or more? It would be better if it were stated "Had it really been a month, or more?" There was a pregnant pause, This ...

I hate how Stephanie Meyers spoiled everything vampire related. So if you don't want to have any cliche comparisons to Twilight, try being as original as possible. Advice: Do not ...

If something were to happen like that to a school in my district, the punishment would be out of school suspension. The parents might have notification of it by phone, ...

Hi. Welcome to YWS. Just to let you know; read the rules before posting a story. To answer your question; no. I do not like Shakespeare, though I do have ...

I did not find a whole lot of grammar errors or anything. That is good. Here are some things that should be fixed though: “We can make it work. Don’t ...

I feel like such an outcast on here for having no interest in anime/cartoons whatsoever.

wow. people are really mean. and don't worry. my story will never ever be on this ridiculous website again. This "Ridiculous website" is a site for mature writers who are ...

I love UnderOath. Just thought that needed to be said. Now to the critiquing: her lips a vibrant pink from the little light given from my lighter as she sat ...

I didn't find a lot of things that needed much editing. “And what will you do for me in return?” Zeke asked softly , coyly. I think it would sound ...

Sometimes I wonder what it would be like if the world were to fall .[b] There should be a period at the end instead of a comma. [b]I f the ...

I only read a small fraction of this. I could not bring myself to read the rest due to all the errors and terrible style of writing. I can see ...

But most of all, Amy knew not to bring up Martin. It would be better if you were to not use the word "But," especially if you are going to ...

Since my camera is terrible, you all will have a hard time to read this, but atleast you guys can see how squiggily I write. Yay!