SpencerNolanRivers

Hey, Flute. I am also a vegetarian, though it not being because of my culture since I am not Indian. I agree with you about cheerleaders, but I am a ...

"Sis, you okay?" my 20 year old brother , Jonathan asked. This is way too straight-forward. People would have looked at us as twins if it weren't for my green ...

Hello, Kate! My name is Kiara (though, you can call me Kiki), and welcome to YWS. I am also fifteen, but wont for long. My birthday is next week. You ...

Alrighty, Ms.TheRealGossipGirl, I will be critiquing this piece here. There are a lot of errors, mistakes, and grammaritical wrongs within this story that really needs fixing. First off; format the ...

I feel so late. I wrote my first story (outside of a school assignment) when I was eleven, after I started to have an actual interest in literature and reading.

Well, welcome to YWS. My name is Kiara, you can call me Kiki if you'd like as my username says. Before posting any writings, you must review two of other ...

bolts of lightening lights the sky like a giant torch was being flashed on and off. I think that clears up the sentence a whole lot better. which Mr Rodaway ...

I just ran and ran, until I realized there was nothing to run to , There is the correct form of "To." “Yeah . Go Tigers.” There should be a ...

10/10 xD

Okay? Well, I like her. I'm just saying that it's going to take her quite a few movies to get better acting. Not liking her because her acting is bad ...

Spreche ich etwas Deutsch. I speak some german.

I think that she is very beautiful, yes. But her being in few movies doesn't mean that he talent is bad. Shes only been in three! That's not true. Megan ...

I didn't find many errors that were too bad, so well done. I love this story so far, and how everything isn't boldly stated in the beginning; I like finding ...

Guess who? Hm... are you the very handsome lad in the middle? Or the other handsome lad on the right?

I hadn't finished the entire thing, but here are a lot of errors that I had caught. Before five years ago , I had a nice, average, happy family. There ...