Sorsha2

Again, too rushed - there's no real sense of plot development here. Also, I find the fact that everyone seems to know the details of this 'prophecy' except her a ...

whoa whoa whoa. Waaaay too rushed. You need to provide a LOT more information. Ruslan going on about the gravity of her mission, the danger she's about to face, and ...

Just to expand on what was previously mentioned- the characters are too flat. There is no description of what they look like or any real depth to thier personality. It ...