Sorsha2

:) thanks a bunch. I was debating if I should use a 'slang' type word for f@ck, but I wasn't sure if anyone would understand what the character was getting ...

As per the suggestion of my very first reviewer :) I have posted the next part of the story in a small portion. In this scene we are introduced to ...

It feels a little Harry Potter-ish with the whole magical school thing (although I'm sure your intention is stand as far apart from HP as possible ;P) I like the ...

Thank you so much for taking the time to read the piece and leave your comment. I did find it to be very helpful and I am soooooooo pleased that ...

Hello, I am new the to young writers society and this is my very first post on this site. :) Please offer and constructive criticism as I know I desperately ...

Again, too rushed - there's no real sense of plot development here. Also, I find the fact that everyone seems to know the details of this 'prophecy' except her a ...

whoa whoa whoa. Waaaay too rushed. You need to provide a LOT more information. Ruslan going on about the gravity of her mission, the danger she's about to face, and ...

Just to expand on what was previously mentioned- the characters are too flat. There is no description of what they look like or any real depth to thier personality. It ...