Sorsha2

I had a dream one night and woke up inspired to put as much of it on paper as I could. I wrote this in about twenty minutes the same ...

Hello, I would be glad to give you an idea for a title, but I'm afraid you need to give more information outside of the two chapters here. A title ...

Hello Lil, I am back to review chpt. 1 as per your request :) Noel Flincher sat in the back of the classroom, eyes closed. She wasn’t asleep. She wasn’t ...

Oh. One more thing. Why is this story written all in italics? And second, any thoughts Rhodri is having doesn't need to be in bold or have "quotation" marks around ...

I think the above critiquer was a little harsh but I kind of see a few things they mentioned. The dialogue does seem a bit back and forth without enough ...

Hello everyone, here is the first part of chapter three. The story is beginning to build up momentum so I hope you enjoy. Comments/ reviews are welcomed and appreciated. **** ...

Okay. I REALLY enjoyed this piece. There were a couple of scentences that felt a little awkward but as a whole it was beautiful and intriguing. I was listening to ...

Hello, OK here's my review :) ....... “I don’t think I’ll ever fully understand your game,” Dala grumbled, digging her talons into the supple wood of the toddlers crib, leaving ...

Hey you, thanks for the review :) as always it is greatly appreciated. I wasn't sure if I would use one or both, its still kind of up in the ...

Okie dokie - here is the second half of chapter two.... This scene continues after a small break in time from chapter two part a. Any comments, critiques would be ...

Here is a link for the FBI website, it should have all the information you're looking for. :) I was doing some minor research on the bureau as well so ...

Woo hoo! Thanks for the review :) The hearts are "waiting" to be bled dry? Odd usage - makes it seem as if the bleeding is voluntary; seems a bit ...

Helloooo :) These are two potential intro's to a novel I am writing. Please let me know which ones you like, why and any comments on grammar, scentences structure and ...

Hello MG... Here's my review for this piece. Overall comments - I like this piece very much. I like your style and your general pace although there were a few ...

Hey Pol, back for another review :P He slowly reached into his pocket and drew out a silver ring. There was only a small, red jewel placed in the center. ...