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Faithe, Scasha - so sorry it took me so long to get back to you both. Thanks so much for your indepth reviews!!!! I will be sure to make any ...

As per usual, constructive criticism is very much appreciated. I hope, for those of you who do read this or who have been following the story to see the progression, ...

Hi Moirah, Your piece caught my eye so here is my reivew, if I appear a bit blunt I apologize :P I found a few things sounded/ or seemed a ...

Hm. Well the person above me gave me too much info when they weren't supposed to...? Kind of killed it for me because now I have this older, balding, broody ...

The rest of Chapter three It amazed Sorsha to see just how quickly the weather changed in nearly a blink of an eye. The sun had long since disappeared behind ...

hello, Okay, here is what I noticed right off the bat. In a small and simple village called Shelton, there lived a sixteen year old boy named Clover . Clover ...

It was a pretty good start, my only critique is there were a lot of redundancies as far as word usage. Every few days, when Sol is in the middle ...

Ok. I am all for writing to make yourself happy. But this site is about serious writing that you want to stand behind because you have dreams/aspirations to see the ...

.... omg. Dude - I am blown away. I loved this - and if you check my reviews you'll see that I'm pretty sparing with high praise until I am ...

To be directed to the attention of Fallon MacLean, Author of When Innocence Dies. You sneaky son of a bitch. I should have known you would have something interesting up ...

Okie Dokie - Chapter Three is up. As per usual, constructive criticism is very much appreciated. We continue the story with Laura awakening in a strange and sinister environment, from ...

FINALLY!!!! Action! Intrigue! Danger! Glowing WEEDS!!! (Meh?) lol Okay - THIS is what should have been introducted soooooo much sooner. I can appreciate you wanting to really outline the life ...

It's not a bad start but plotwise its a bit vague. Then again, I suppose in the first chapter thats bound to almost always be the case :P Also, for ...

Hey Bishop, Thanks for the comment. Actually, the Detective doesn't really become the 'hunted', at least - not necessarily in the context I think you mean and not for very ...

Hey everyone the next installment of When Innocence dies introduces us to more characters. In this chapter we discover Faye and Kyle - two detectives who are investigating the mysterious ...