Sorrowspinner

This was good, and you had a nice idea! Just a few little things that were niggling at me though. I thought it was just too short for the rhyming ...

This was kind of short, but it had so much potential. Couldn't' you make it a little longer? Tell us what these sentiments are that the author is bringing to ...

You write what you know. Losing yourself to the flow Of words and written sentiments. Show the world the real you. Show them what you can do. With the pen ...

I'm not a student journalist, but I am majoring in that when I graduate high school. Right now, I'm just a kid in her school newspaper :P ahahha ahahahahaha... ahaha ...

It may be a draft, but it is very good. I don't think it needs many corrections, since it's mostly sound. Plus, I loved reciting this to a little jingle ...

Man, I relate so much to this poem :O Well, the people above me typed what I might have said... But anyway, it is wonderful and I do love it!

The rhyming isn't an asset to this poem; I think it should be rewritten without it. I think that the first two stanzas could set the last one up very ...

Ah, but isn't hatred more like a sword? One that you impale yourself upon and swing violently at phantasms of foes? Either way, the end result is self harm, and ...

[pre]Incomplete A pen runs out of ink. A ruler falls to the floor. A fierce shout of: “No More!” She is at the very brink. She pulls at her hair. ...

Ooohhh, very good! Maybe you could write more for it? I'd like to know more! Unless you want to leave it to our imaginations :D

The consept of hatred being a weed is good, I like it. I think you need to be a bit more descriptive with that though. Not so much about how ...

I agree with the above comments, but anyway... I really liked this poem very much! The images used were very good, I applaud you :D

This doesn't go anywhere after saying "Hatred is a weed." It's a simple simile, and you didn't really do much with it. It's not very much fun for a reader ...

Buchanan perspective...? *brain shrinks at definition* I feel real stupid now -_-

...I haven't changed it yet? :O