Sometimesinbetween

10/10 hilarious! Loved it!!!! :D :lol:

I really liked this! :) The only thing I caught was this: I wait to the temple and kneel to Juno Was it supposed to be 'at' the temple rather ...

notorious KBN First letter must be first.

This was pretty good! I didn't see anything wrong with the grammer or puncuation. :) Is there more? I hope so! :D -Sometimes-

This was very well written! :D However, I think you should space out your paragraphs. Also, when a new person is talking you need a new paragraph. :) PM if ...

Kindergarten (there were about five Ashley's in my class!)

I usually write in third person, but I seem to often find myself writing in first person (usually in my spur of the moment writings).

I liked it! I love so much the chocolate sensation, These candies deserve a standing ovation! I loved this part! :D No more chocolate, this moment i dread You need ...

This was pretty good! :) I knew I should have, but I couldn’t help myself. Did you mean 'should n't have'? “I never thought I’d have to tell a teenage ...

Jemlar smiled as he watched his little son’s clumsy attempt at imitating him make a bed, by crisscrossing the extra pine boughs he had cut earlier. “Jesmal, let us go ...

I really like this! The second line didn't flow very well, maybe you could reword it a little? The rest was great! Also it had no puncuation. Other than that ...

marsupials GVT Last letter must be last.

This was pretty good. It had a neat feel to it. I have to say I didn't really understand it. :oops: And yes, I do think it needs puncuation. Great ...

keys WDC The last letter must be last.

Hello! Welcome to YWS!! What kinds of things do you like to write? -Sometimes-