Someguy

Okay. I think it's a good beginning and that U have a nice idea.(Concerning chapter 1) The present going towards the past was a bit thrown on the ground if ...

I have to agree with Vernon. The spacing is a bit funky. :P It is nice. I like the idea where you write about it,but I think(and you don't have ...

I liked it. Pretty awesome. You should add stanzas, 'cause when I first saw this I felt,' I don't feel like reading this' It just makes it easier to read. ...

A bit short. I think u could lengthen it. I like the idea and where it's going, but ended randomly. You must continue working on it. :)

This was a bit random... I expected more.

Who cares! It just doesn't feel like it. Who would win? A pie or a knife?

This was a strong poem. You came in and threw all your pain and anger on it. That's what I like about it. Everyone pretty much said what I wanted ...

It's nice, where u go and use a ABCB rhyme scheme and then all of the it changes in the last stanza. Pretty cool. I like the way you always ...

Well... It's nice, but let me tell you now. This poem needs a massive expansion! I get what you're trying to say, it's just that it's not given clearly like ...

Jeez! This is awesome. Reminds me of wolfs' rain.

8/10

I don't like rap. I despise it. I can't stand the beat that keeps playing over and over and over... But this was freaking crazy. Dude! For once I'm gonna ...

My method to know if it's a good lyric is to kinda make your own 'song' with the lyric, but I couldn't do it with this lyric. I tried really ...

I thought is was a nice poem. Really into depth with the peace. :wink: The rhyme scheme was a bit strange. I think you should pay more attention to that. ...

I really, really liked it! I am really interested in World War 1 and 2 and you just gave me another reason. There is so much you can say, whether ...