Someguy

Real good beginning. It really is a weird story, but it is good. "Well if you would like to we have a job for you" You need to put a ...

You just need to make spaces. Youre new so I wont start with the spelling and stuff so yeah. It is a nice story, but you could work on it ...

Really good. Don't post the entire thing. Just break it up in parts. Overall, very good.

This was a small script, and not much happesned. You were running through the story, you could've added more detail. Make it a bit longer.

Water Water comes, Water goes. Water doesn’t stand still, It flows It makes me happy, It brings me joy. I sit at the edge, And write a song. A song ...

It wasn't good, nor was it bad. I just think you didn't spend much time on this poem. The concept of the poem is good, but it still needs a ...

About that, English isn't my home language so...

This is totally different than other. You took a brave step and was congratulated for this. Very good. Really new and creative Well done

Very good story line. Love it. And it is another country. Not the USA. Love that. You described everything very well. The imegary is good. The assassin groaned in pain ...

A bit random, but good. Just it doen't make sense. Sorry, but without a beginning, I'll have to say no, I didn't like this. Get a basic beginning. I see ...

Ha ha. Very funny. Didnt expect a pie. Very good imagery. Cant find anything wrong. Good

Not much to say. Really bored. A feeling I have a feeling, A feeling that I might die today. ‘I cant stand up. The pain.’ People say it is like, ...

Not bad. I think you can make record or something. I already have my own beat in my head.(I write songs for our band.) Just here and there that doen't ...

Ha, this last line reminds me on Eminem. I mean, every time you here his name, he's fighting some guy. Not bad. A bit harsh,but I guess you did have ...

You write good. The fourth paragraph I think, you use the word 'wolf' too many times. Not bad though. It can become a nice book.