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YAY! And the Gal writes! :) I love it!! Its very snippy, in an 18th century, 'I'm better than you are' kind of way. Haha... too true! I think I ...

First of all, you might want to keep the chapters separated. Like, each post you have here is one chapter. :) As far as the story? For me, it starts ...

Welcome, Jacko! And write whatever you feel like. We'll tell you whether it's good or not. ;)

Songs always have quotation marks around them. So it should be "I Write Sins Not Tragedies" when you're talking about that song. And albums are italicized, much like books. Also, ...

This is very prologue-y. That is, it lives and breathes and exists solely as an infodump. And this isn't good. Though I know mythology is a little tricky to write, ...

Hehe, sorry to bug you again, but I got the critique from my teacher. Yay? Yay! Anyway, this is what she had to say to it. Wet sand clung to ...

"Shut up Grif. We have 15 SPEW and YWS forces. I think we should split up into groups of three. 1 cadet to 2 commandos. Cortana has given us some ...

Second Prologue As most of you no doubt know, seeing as you're very intelligent and whatnot, Lloyd Samuel Douglas was a very influential man, but he is almost as mythical ...

First Prologue So, I know what you're thinking. Yeah, Grif writes all these adventures about the SPEW commandoes (which is really funny since TECHNICALLY SPEW doesn't even exist... now how's ...

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We'll make sure that Dreamy and Reas keep a good eye on you. ;)

Welll... you can be our translator! And HA! SPEW EATS KITTENS!

Sadie's father: "...once you’re dead, who knows? It sounds exciting in any case. You’re free from your body.” The freak: “...I wouldn’t be a freak?” Haha... edited for lack of ...

.... just think... you could have a major crisis on your hands here... some people actually like russia. But that's where the beauty of it all comes! Like Russia? Well, ...