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Yeah, the last three lines are slightly confusing because you describe what seems to be hobos (maybe?) and suddenly with the word "birthright" we're thrown into a more civilized world, ...

Or, alternatively, The Shiny Medal. ;)

I never liked the word "cacaphony"... Oh well. Yay! Gouging out teacher's eyes! And don't we all have a secret part of ourselves? ;)

Beer-colored sunset... eep. So it's ended with a batch of alcohol and now she's bleeding it all out. Yeah, this is pretty. :) In a slightly morbid way, of course... ...

One thing weird about this poem (and your other one) is how the beginning is so jerky. One reason why I like your poetry is because it leads into the ...

Stuff on Dialogue First... dialogue grammar! I wrote this article. Perhaps you'll find it useful? With that said, let's go to the actual way of supporting dialogue. Now I know ...

They’dll eventually end up in their own little groups. Should be "they'll." So even though their all in the same pot, Should be "they're" instead of "their." The homosexual that’s ...

OMG, this is funny to read, lol!

Hehe! :D

She's too devious though. ;) And ha! Lupin's in love! *laughs* Don't censor yourself. It's BITCH, dammit! :D

This doesn't seem like a full chapter -- for one, it's too short. Are your other chapters as short as this? :?

Ha! My name is ________! Yeah. We're going to force you to write this whether you know it or not. *plays with Crysi's hair*

I say we make a Trojan Bunny! *sings along*

This might be very helpful for those doing Nano (maybe)!

Haha... you're just jealous you're not in SPEW. :p