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Um... sacred honor, anyone?

Yay! Typo fixed. ;) I wrote it right on paper -- honest! XD

He came from nowhere, Incan did From the murky depths of the sea. A primitive brain with a primordial yearning To eat all the poems he could see. While slinking ...

Hehehe... okay. I think this poem would be better without the opinion inserted. For example, these two lines: a window to delusions of reality. I would cut them out because ...

This is definitely pretty and I like the imagery you come up with. :) You might want to try a little editing to make it prettier. It feels a little ...

Eep. Diedrick scares me... And haha... you asked for it. Have a lot of sex. Who knows? Maybe one of the girls will be kind enough to kill me. -- ...

Hmmmmm... Hehe! Okay. Let's look at Poe, shall we? :D This is the beginning of "Hop Frog": I NEVER knew anyone so keenly alive to a joke as the king ...

Okay... Every night I look at the stars, and I think of you. This seems to be the most interesting part of the poem, so you're going to want to ...

Not bad! One of the things that struck me about this whole piece was how randomly put together it was. Now this isn't bad, but I think you might be ...

I'm a mod... And Lama: Change your siggy! NOW!

Okay... up to this one point, I'm fine. But then I get confused. I'm not sure why, but maybe you can tell me and stuff? ^_^;; Susan Merrick had hung ...

OMG. So we were at church, and then the choir sang "Amazing Grace." And I didn't think much of it at first, because I thought the song was over-rated, etc., ...

I thought the first paragraph was a little overdone, like you wanted to bring us in, but the rest of the paragraphs were beautiful in a simple way. Like, the ...

¡Ay de mi! Well, tomorrow has come and gone, and now I am stuck on a cliffhanger. This will never do.... The beginning is a little simple for my tastes, ...

It's not that long, and since it's already separated into sections, you can post it by section. ^_^;;