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Well... it is rather old. ;) Oh well. Moved to the lounge. And please remember that this is about two years old, LOL.

Since you want this to be published, I shall be frank with you. :P I read this much before I gave up: “Evan, it’s me, Punnett.” There are some phone ...

Hehehe... he's seen it, but he considers it a poem which is infected with AIDS, or gangrene, so it's not worth his time to comment, LMAO. :D

It was too quick. :P You have a nice stye and an even nicer idea. But you have to draw it out and make it last and linger. Think about ...

I have to agree with Cicero. The running together of words is an over-used effect, methinks. I mean, I can see the effect you're trying to achieve -- you want ...

Yeah.. you have all these things happening, but no colors or feelings or anything. And then the "your face" second person bit is a little funny for me. No sé. ...

Hahahaha... didn't see that coming! It's pretty... I like how it shows that words have lives of their own, but you said it a lot more poetically than I. ;) ...

NO! MUST...HAVE... WIGGY'S PIG HAT... *dies*

Granted, but it's not trained and pees all over your room. I wish I could clean my room tomorrow!

*dances* YAY! We should all totally have crazy hats. Who's with me? :D

You need to show more than tell. Like, I like narrative styles and I use it frequently through my own work, but there always has to be conflict in it ...

Hahaha... I've been wanting to reread this and give a non-crappy critique. So, after I did my history test, I decided to read it and stuff! Fun stuff, no? :) ...

Hahahaha... never had a prom before, but who knows! This is my movie, no? :) Opening Credits A Day in the Life - The Beatles Hahaha... oh, I love this ...

Mwhahaha... I never saw this thread. XD It's a fun poem. :D What do you suppose poems taste like? :P

...you're quite an angry person/chimp/thingy. ;)