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Well, I don't know. If you have random symbolism, without any story, then it is just fluffy imagery. What you want to do is incorporate the imagery into something tangible, ...

Wait... what do you do for kendo lessons?

Not really. I have this really light face that gets ridiculously red, so I look like a mixture of a tomato and a red onion. And I tend to blubber. ...

Meh. I don't like coffee, so that would never do! But some of those pastries... *drools*

Quite. The next person who says the words "beer bottle" shall be hit by one. -- Sadie's father ...only slightly pissed off! :D How often do you bathe?

To restrict us, I think. -- Daniel To make us laugh. -- Sadie's father To oppress. -- Sadie To make things work. -- Claude Hahaha... so fun. Do you consider ...

Dialects or actual languages? Oh well. Eight languages and nineteen dialects. -- Sadie's father Are you involved in politics?

Granted, but now he's a very smart teacher who won't accept anything but the best -- otherwise, you'll fail. I wish my driving was better!

Granted, but you have to work through the weekends cleaning bathrooms. I wish my calculus test wasn't looming over my head.

Sadly, you have no critiques. So therefore, I must give you a very lame critique that makes no sense, and hopefully others better in poetry will give you a critique. ...

One of the reasons why writers don't want to extensively edit their work because it's SO HARD. I'm serious. Some editing, for me, is easy to do, but to rewrite? ...

Use spellcheck. Not Knarled... gnarled. And there's several other mistakes as well. Right now, you are using symbolism to establish a setting. That's nice and everything, but you haven't even ...

The poem seems to have ADD. Like, it;s humorous at one point and then very serious the next, so it's kind of strange. Still, you have all these messages that ...

Hehehe... since someone already commented on the substance, let's get nitty-gritty, shall we? :D I can’t stand her anymore; She keeps on knocking on my door. I can’t possibly let ...

I like quick deaths. I mean, for the first death for FREAK, it's like, "WTF? That person is dead ? What did s/he do to deserve that?" So yeah. And ...