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Enjoy? Obedience to authority, loyalty to self, devotion to the cause. The life of a soldier. The life of this soldier. Ah... a philosophical musing in the beginning. The problem? ...

Granted, but now you can't pay for anything else. I wish I could finish with this critique already! It's about eight pages so far, about to be nine, yeesh.

Er... hate to break it to you, but that format is pretty unreadable. You might want to edit it for those on the web instead of just your teacher. What ...

Haha... um... yeah. Okay, maybe I've been reading too many nonfiction books lately, but OMG. And I know this is a piece for a competition written a long time ago, ...

Hmmm... One of the weird thing about this poem is the creative spelling. Sometimes, as in a nonsense poem, this works, but other times this doesn't. I'm not quite sure ...

Hehehe, this was a fun read! Mind you, I would have been completely confused if I hadn't read the first paragraph that includes your explanation, but it was still fun! ...

Hehe, this should really be put in the lyrics section! I can always move it for you, if you want. And if you don't... well, it's made a nice home ...

Heheh! Two Adams on a thread! :D Adam Atlantian>> Thanks! I was afraid it might be corny and stuff, but your assurance is always nice. ;) Myth>> Hahaha. The sad ...

Underwear. You don't realize how much you love it until several days pass without any sign of laundry being done. And then, miracle of miracles, clean pants come at last! ...

OMG. Don't do those types of polls, lol! It shouldn't matter whether I want to continue on -- instead, it should matter whether YOU want to continue on. Be self-serving, ...

Hmmm... First of all, I must admit, I'm not really a fan of the line breaks. I mean, if it's a story poem, then why even bother with the line ...

Hmmm... I think this poem might be better as a narrative poem. That is, you're describing a story instead of feelings. :) At the moment, it's still a little abstract, ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! I believe you critiqued one of my stories, so I ought to return the favor, no? ;) I read this last night out loud, ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! It's always nice to have some talented poets on this site, and you seem to be no exception. :D I hope you're around for ...

I... come up with a plot. I actually sort of suck at titles. Until I can get real characters (or real in my mind) to identify with, I'm totally lost. ...