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(Psst... this is a place to critique, not debate. ;)) This was a fairly interesting piece... not really an essay, but it definitely reminded me of a column of a ...

darn right titanic was a conspiracy. But he got it all wrong. There were mysterious lights reported that same day over the northern plains, and the reports of abductions saw ...

I got yelled at for writing in pencil all caps once... I'm scarred for life now. O_o

Discuss.

Yeah, essays and stories are very different. In essays, you mostly try to begin and end your paragraphs with topic sentences. Of course, in stories, anything goes as long as ...

He's alive in the painting? Yep...

...essays and stories are different? Indent for dialogue and emphasis.

Haha, love The Beatles references. One thing that you might check is how you set things up. It's almost like you're afraid that if you don't give every single detail ...

Moved to Randomness.

Ah! I love her poem "Daddy." I mean, my first reactions to it were bad, but then as I thought about it more (and couldn't stop thinking about it) well... ...

OMG. I DID NOT READ THAT. YOU COULD NOT HAVE KILLED STRICK. *whimpers and hides away*

Or maybe because they haven't seen it yet?Query letters might possibly take a while. Still! It looks like soon I shall read Chionophobia in all its glory, which is good ...

I chose two random names, don't worry, so I have nothing against Mitch. And that was only really because I didn't know the second person's name and... yeah. :P Kind ...

Hmm... First of all, word choice! You wrote "shovel slams" which... I like the shovel part, but I don't like the verb, just because when I hear the word "slams" ...

My favorite lines were these: His eyes... Wait. He had no eyes from which to see, This is because they seemed more true to the poem. The poem is wandering, ...