Snoink

...I'm not sure whether I should laugh or cry. Probably both.

It's too... overdone. Like, I know that this is poetry, but it is narrative poetry and that means that the story has to be just as strong as the poem, ...

Yeah. Some posts are missing because of the transfer. YWS had to be moved to another server temporarily as it was taxing system resources. In the process of the move, ...

Eep! You must format your story into paragraphs if you want any helpful critiques. O_o

Now that's even more disturbing...

Thanks for spotting the typo! It was right when I wrote it down on paper, but alas! It didn't transcribe. :D Yes... hehehe... too much physics. ;)

Inner Snoink? Oh dear...

...white? Everything is colourful! :o ...yes, I did that on purpouse.

Just because it tastes like strawberries doesn't mean it is a strawberry. :P

Hmmm... is this a storybook beginning?

*moved to Lyrics*

Of course it tastes like strawberries! But then agaiin, it depends on your definition of what a strawberry is. In this case, I have defined it as "the world" so ...

OMG! IS BACK UP! OMG! THE WORLD TASTES LIKE STRAWBERRIES AGAIN! W00TNESS!

In my dreams of death I stand on top a cliff My eyes closed shut, The wind willing me to jump. But in the back of my mind I wonder... ...

MARRIED! What kind of cake???