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Hehehe... just as long as you have tact. ;)

*Moved to the Lounge*

I now intend to write a story entirely in netspeak. It'll be interesting to see which critiquer attempts to kill me first. ^_^ Hahaha, I wanted to do that too, ...

It's a little bit too elongated in the middle, and that's what makes it look a little weird. And it needs a slightly longer neck and more slender features, since ...

I might have to take up your challenge. ;)

∫F•ds is the definition of Work, which is force through a distance. :D Yes. Boo to physics. I think I'll show my physics teacher this poem tomorrow. He'll love it... ...

Oh my... it looks like I'm going to have a boy?

Well, don't think of this as in the real space. I use R2 and R3 so that it can be imagined, but it could also be used for other dimensions ...

Oh my. You have definitely improved last I've seen, and... that's saying something.

Ooo... I did like this. Yes, it is fragmented, but it's done in such a good way...! I shall tell you why I liked it line by line and hopefully ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! :D With that said, I think your poem could stand some revision. It's not that the idea is bad -- I've read some very good ...

Let's take the point (x,y) in the space R2. Both x and y can go on to infinity and negative infinity, so there is an infinite amount of points that ...

I like purple...

Hello and welcome to YWS! :D I'm just going to run through your poem and hope that my comments might help you (and who knows -- maybe garner up more ...

Ahhh... this is a much better poem, I think, then the first one I critiqued. This one is different because it uses specific imagery and doesn't pretend to say anything ...