Snoink

Thanks for all your comments, they were all extremely helpful! I edited the piece slightly... feel free to comment more if you want. :) And this is it. This story ...

She peeked into the room. “May I come in?” “Certainly.” For a moment, she didn’t believe him. He could tell because her eyes became squinty and she looked him over ...

Ash Ketchum Age: 14 Build: Slender Profession: Pokemon addict Background: He was the world's greatest Poke master when a horrible accident happened and he caught on fire and now looks ...

Hehe! :D Adverbs weaken a sentence by emphasizing the adverb rather than the other words. Sometimes that's good. A well-placed adverb can beat any other description anyday. Other times, it's ...

Well... for the camera picture, the camera looks a little blurred. So that's why it doesn't do anything for me, really. If it were more clear, that would be a ...

I have not read the rest of the story (bad me) so forgive me if this isn't really in depth since I don't want to read something Critical that gets ...

Wow... a psychedelic poem about mushrooms. Who would have thought? It was a lovely nonsense poem. You should be bored more often. Small nitpics: And the [should be their] stems ...

Where were these taken? The first one is definitely the best... my sister asked if they were real since it looked so surreal. Beautiful stuff. :D

Which one do you like better? Mickey Mouse or Bugs Bunny? Why?

It's Incan!

*flails* Like... this has been the only story I've read completely on YWS and when I saw it updated, I hoped that either this meant: 1) You had updated this. ...

I have an imac, with the resolution as dull as I can get. Still, usually things are bright enough for me to see. ;)

Now that I read it silently to myself, the rhyming is much better. Still, when I was reading this out loud, most of the lines didn't run together very smoothly. ...

Uhhh.. maybe my eyes get way too distracted, but take away the asterisk, please. Once I hit that asterisk, I get jogged back to reality and... I don't want to. ...

My bad! :P Okay... It looks pretty cool so far. The one thing I noticed that, on your main page, you have these bright vivid pictures on the right (balance, ...