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Hmmm... the first two lines do sound archaic, but in a very awkward way, so I'm not quite sure it really works as a hook. Are the last two lines ...

I can lock it if you so desire. But it would probably be better to abandon ship. Nobody's going to hurt you if you decide not to write in this ...

Here's the history!!!! A couple of decades ago, no writer for the general public would dream of addressing the reader directly by using the second person. The approach would have ...

Wiki article on Pat Buchanan And SPEW... nobody knows what SPEW is, so you can't be a newb! ;)

No... this isn't a "which one is better" thread. Because obviously American is better. ;) No, seriously, this was inspired by seeing several English dudes complain about Americans spellings and ...

In fiction writing, there is a saying that is "show, don't tell." The same saying can be said for poetry. ;) Right now, this is a list poem that just ...

I read what was in Dreamy's entry and liked it. Tell us when this gets published! :D

Ooooh... I liked this. I liked the beginning, but it didn't really fit. So I would delete this: A lot of stories are told by people who are smart, or ...

DUDE! Totally groovy! I love the flower background. And I think you should stick with lineless drawings now. This is one of your best pieces (so far). ;)

Hahaha, he is ugly. The only thing I think is weird is the angle... either were looking at him from the top or his is abnormally squashed. O_o

LOL! Yes, more colors would be nice. But I must say, you are very very dedicated to your story. :D

Hmmm... you spelled it right before, since you're an American. For us, it's "skeptical." ;) Anyway... I liked how you described how his eyes had an effect on the narrator, ...

Yeah, YWS doesn't have paragraph indents. Instead, put spaces in between each of your paragraphs. It's much more readable that way. ^_^ First of all, what I liked! I liked ...

P.S. Who the heck is Pat Buchanan? He's on all the polls! Pat Buchanan is like SPEW. He may or may not exist, but it doesn't really matter which way ...

...well, maybe for my birthday, he can add them? ;) EDIT: If you do have purple stars, maybe you can make it so that it takes 150 reviews to get ...